Today in class we did the 100 word challenge. It was a bit hard because we had to make sure that we had 100 words. we also had to choose a prompt like:
That’s what happens when….
What if…
This is what happens…
The troll under the bridge..
I picked the first one.
Here is my place of writing:
That’s what happens when you are in France…….
My heart was beating faster and faster by the second. I turned red like a tomato. I was going crazy for the love of my live. He had beautiful brown hair and brown eyes he was so cute. His name was Luke Brooks. I just kissed him I was going crazy by the minutes. After a couple of weeks he asked me to marry him. I told him that I will think about it. After one day him came to my house and asked me again if I will marry him. I was silent for a couple of minutes him was turning into a sad face so I said YES I will marry you. He was happy like a flower. Soon I was going to be Jacinta Brooks or also known as Mrs Brooks. Finally we were a couple forever. That’s what happens In France the romantic place to be.
What did you think of it?
What are some ways that I can improve?
Send me your writing down blow.
Dear Coralie,
I loved the start of your story because you really put some thought into it.I also liked how you used alot of discribtive words it made it really interesting. To improve on your writing you could use less discribtive words in your story.
From Scarlet
Dear Coralie
I think you used the 100 words really well. I really enjoyed reading it. I don’t think you need to improve on anything. It is a really good story.
This is my story…
Ouch, I have the worlds biggest headache. I’m in hospital. My arms, legs and head are bandaged. This is what happened…
It started as a dare. My best friend Jacinta dared me to climb the 100 meter tree in the middle of the park. “Hurry up Hashani, you only need to climb it.” She told me. Easy for her to say. She’s not the one climbing the tree. I started to climb. Higher and higher I went until, yes! Finally I reached the top. I looked down. It was a long way down. Now I just need to climb down. Suddenly I loose my balance. Ahhhhh… I’m falling down.
That’s how it happened. How I ended up in a hospital with broken arms, legs and neck.
From Hashani
Dear Coralie,
I was impressed by the two similes you used, figurative language makes your writing sound more interesting. Well done.
Miss Lucas